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posted by [personal profile] eftychia at 05:27pm on 2016-01-17

La neige tombe mais ne reste pas.
Quand elle sort, le soleil vient,
Trop tard pour baiser son ami,
La belle neige, la reine de Janvier.

I'm not used to committing poetry in a second language. Still trying to figure out whether "arrive" flows better than "vient" ... and whether I want to change the tense of "when she leaves" to passé composé (i.e. perfect, "when she has gone"). But fretting about craft aside, here's my impression of this afternoon in Baltimore.

Something about snow tickles the part of my brain where the little French I can manage is stored. So the idea for this popped into my head as soon as it got really bright out, but it took me a while to get it right because rephrasing-for-meter doesn't happen as quickly in a language I'm so rusty in.

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twistedchick: watercolor painting of coffee cup on wood table (Default)
posted by [personal profile] twistedchick at 10:30pm on 2016-01-17
I like it. Now.... it needs to be put to music...
eftychia: Kickdrum (bass drum) with sneakers on the side legs (kickdrum)
posted by [personal profile] eftychia at 10:39pm on 2016-01-17
#blink# It's really rather odd that I wrote a poem and didn't think of it as a song lyric, huh? Thanks for the nudge.
 
posted by [identity profile] realinterrobang.livejournal.com at 03:32am on 2016-01-18
+1, Interesting :)

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