posted by [identity profile] silmaril.livejournal.com at 06:50am on 2004-07-06
I like both versions---the gas-brake-gas-brake is visible (feel-ible?) in the finished version, but also in the original. Although I think it's more Beltway-on-rush-hour type in the tetrameter version...crawl-leap-crawl-leap instead of go-go-go-brake go-go-go-brake (that's more like Route 1 with traffic lights set badly).

Something funny is I was halfway playing with a poem with "patience" as the key word as well, but my subject matter is pottery *grin*.

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