I'd like to hear it at the original tempo. In this rendition the rhythm gets lost in the 3rd and 4th measure of the B section. Knowing you that's probably intentional. However, I think what you're trying for is a kind've syncopated hemiola. If that's the case I think it needs to occur 1 eighth note later. So the B would be something like
Thanks. And yes, "syncopated hemiola" is exactly what I was aiming for there (that very phrase popped into my head as I was trying to figure out how to transcribe what I had just played). Let me know how you think that phrase sounds in the slower MIDI (http://www.darrenzieger.net/sca.mp3) that darrenzieger posted in a comment below. (It is the one spot I wasn't sure I liked when I heard it at the faster tempo.) In the meantime, I'll be playing and listening to your suggested edit and comparing it to the original. If I decide I like it, it wouldn't be the first time you've come up with an improvement to something I've written.
wonderful...
I'd like to hear it at the original tempo. In this rendition the rhythm gets lost in the 3rd and 4th measure of the B section. Knowing you that's probably intentional. However, I think what you're trying for is a kind've syncopated hemiola. If that's the case I think it needs to occur 1 eighth note later. So the B would be something like
|: a'gf e3-|edf e3-|edf e2 c-|c d2-dGb|a3-a2 a'|...
Re: wonderful...